Editing notes: Karafuto Ainu

The first chapter of my dissertation will both be included in my publishable manuscript and will also be presented, in a highly condensed form, at this year's AAS conference.

Very briefly here, I will sketch out key revisions I need to make as well as what is most salient for public dissemination.

Book manuscript

1. I rely too much on too few secondary sources for Russian Sakhalin and Russian Kodiak Island. More into this would be extremely helpful, and help flesh out my own understanding. Plus, are there any translated documents, besides Chekhov?
2. More secondary literature on Japanese colonialism, including better incorporation of extant sources.
3. The bits on de-Indigenization/settler self-Indigenization should be tightened up. Ideally, based on comments during my defence, this should become a larger part of my central argument and the finer details should be moved to the introduction chapter. 
4. And, for that matter, the bit on Okamoto should be fleshed out. I should also stress that this discourse continued unabated.
5. More on the international system and imperialism. This is a good place to bring in literature on civilization discourse as it relates to imperialism and national sovereignty.
6. More on Taiwan and Korea? More on gunship diplomacy and Kuroda?
7. If possible, more on Enomoto and especially his plans for the Ainu, his activities in Russia.
8. Something direct from Kuroda Kiyotaka would also be essential here -- he features so heavily as the "villain" of the chapter, and rightly so, but is largely silent.
9. Really -- more from the Karafuto Ainu and their decedents, if possible. There may be memoirs, interviews, etc.
10. I should mention the violence inflicted upon the Karafuto Ainu in the introduction, and tighten that up too.
11. Footnotes on topics such as Canada's claim of Inuit (and their territories) as Canadian would be good, as would something on race shifting Japanese settlers in Hokkaido.

Basically, everything is good but not great. My argument is sound, the chapter organization is tight. There's nothing wrong with it, but it lacks theoretical depth and nuance which other chapters are rich with. 

AAS

1. A discussion about the concept of a "token of sovereignty"; both in the sense of material objects as well as (in this case) human bodies.
2. A brief history, and overview of relevant historiography (including popular representations).
3. Discussion of the Russo-Japanese rivalry, the situation in Sakhalin/Karafuto and the Kuriles/Chijima.
4. Discuss proposals for Japanese colonization hinged on the bodies of Ainu, with Ainu literally becoming tokens of sovereignty.
5. Talk about the Treaty of St. Petersburg, relatively generous terms for people who became permanent residents.
6. Talk about the state's rescinding of less-than-generous terms for Karafuto Ainu in Japan.
7. Give a brief overview of Matsumoto Juro's account, aftermath.
8. Conclusion.
9. ALSO, if space: multi-ethnic colonization and the Kuriles as Alaskan.